any advice?

Fallen Angel · 15 Jul 2007, 17:20

hey folks
dont worry i aint gonna ask for advice on guys this time lol having to much fun being single.

back to the point. i am applying to university for a diploma in nursing, however as part of the application process i am required to submit a personal statement. i have no idea what to write or how to structure it!!

Any ideas will be much appreciated.
hugs
leeann
xx

SamCat · 15 Jul 2007, 20:59

Sorry i cannot help but i'm really happy youre having fun!!

Fallen Angel · 15 Jul 2007, 21:15

cheers:) Me too!
hugs
leeann
xx

Fallen Angel · 15 Jul 2007, 22:27

ok folks managed to get a rough 1st draft of my personal statment. still missing some info tho. please let me kno wot you think.
I am now eighteen years old and about to complete a full-time course in NQ preparation for child care at SCQF level 5. I have succeeded in achieving all goals set throughout the course. I am now going on to do a National Certificate in child care and early education SCQF level 6 at Forth Valley College. In the future I see myself as a general nurse within a care setting, giving something worthwhile back to the community, which has itself, given much to me throughout my formative years.

I was educated at Sunnyside Primary school and Alloa Academy where I achieved the aforementioned qualifications. I would consider the fact that I have an intermediate two in care, a bonus in aiding my nursing training.

I wish to complete my diploma in nursing, maintain and develop my nursing skills, and by doing so, further my career. I can see myself undertaking a Masters Degree in either Nursing or Midwifery in the not too distant future.

In conclusion, I am a naturally caring person and believe that everyone should receive the best care possible. I am also an enthusiastic learner and wish to learn as much as I can in order to develop myself and career. I am a hard working and adaptable person who is determined to forge a successful career for herself within the nursing profession. I trust this personal statement is both informative and enlightening, should any further information be required, I will be more than happy to provide it.

LucyK! · 16 Jul 2007, 15:33

My personal statement it art based which obviously is different to yours, but mine was a lot longer than this one. I was advised to include (off the top of my head);

My education and qualifications up until I wrote it...

A small paragraph as to why you're applying to where you are (small enough so that it can be removed or edited if you apply elsewhere)...

My influences (in art) - which artists have influenced my own work, or aspects of my work, or have inspired changes in my work...I guess for you that would be a load of drivvle about why you want to be a nurse...
What you aim to achieve from doing it all (which basically is expanding the last line of your first paragraph)

You also need to let them know what you're like as a person and what interests and activities you do that have nothing to do with nursing/caring - in mine I talked about music and what I've done involving motorsport, you need to show that you're an all-rounder.

KebLou · 16 Jul 2007, 22:22

You also need to say what you've got to offer the University. It needs to read less about you and more about what you can offer them.

duke knooby · 16 Jul 2007, 22:25

(really sell yourself, they have to have YOU as part of the team) or just make it up..

Fallen Angel · 17 Jul 2007, 01:20

thanks:) wll see wot i can do

Heli · 17 Jul 2007, 02:40

A couple of tips i was given:

Try and find different way to start a sentence (It's too easy to start with "I" all the time)
Try and keep it to about 500 words
Be different and creative about it....remember that they read loads of these; standing out always helps. And make it personal; dont keep it really formal, let it flow naturally/briefly/relevently informal for a couple of lines when talking about the past or something.

15 Jul 2007, 17:20	#1
Fallen Angel Youth Gone Wild Join Date: 19.09.2003 Location: See the mad one over there.... Posts: 693	any advice? hey folks dont worry i aint gonna ask for advice on guys this time lol having to much fun being single. back to the point. i am applying to university for a diploma in nursing, however as part of the application process i am required to submit a personal statement. i have no idea what to write or how to structure it!! Any ideas will be much appreciated. hugs leeann xx

15 Jul 2007, 22:27	#4
Fallen Angel Youth Gone Wild Join Date: 19.09.2003 Location: See the mad one over there.... Posts: 693	first draft of statment- wot u think?? ok folks managed to get a rough 1st draft of my personal statment. still missing some info tho. please let me kno wot you think. I am now eighteen years old and about to complete a full-time course in NQ preparation for child care at SCQF level 5. I have succeeded in achieving all goals set throughout the course. I am now going on to do a National Certificate in child care and early education SCQF level 6 at Forth Valley College. In the future I see myself as a general nurse within a care setting, giving something worthwhile back to the community, which has itself, given much to me throughout my formative years. I was educated at Sunnyside Primary school and Alloa Academy where I achieved the aforementioned qualifications. I would consider the fact that I have an intermediate two in care, a bonus in aiding my nursing training. I wish to complete my diploma in nursing, maintain and develop my nursing skills, and by doing so, further my career. I can see myself undertaking a Masters Degree in either Nursing or Midwifery in the not too distant future. In conclusion, I am a naturally caring person and believe that everyone should receive the best care possible. I am also an enthusiastic learner and wish to learn as much as I can in order to develop myself and career. I am a hard working and adaptable person who is determined to forge a successful career for herself within the nursing profession. I trust this personal statement is both informative and enlightening, should any further information be required, I will be more than happy to provide it.

15 Jul 2007, 20:59	#2
SamCat Hello Harry!!!! Join Date: 11.09.2006 Location: London Posts: 3,086	Sorry i cannot help but i'm really happy youre having fun!!

15 Jul 2007, 21:15	#3
Fallen Angel Youth Gone Wild Join Date: 19.09.2003 Location: See the mad one over there.... Posts: 693	cheers:) Me too! hugs leeann xx

16 Jul 2007, 15:33	#5
LucyK! The Monster Is Luce Join Date: 14.04.2002 Location: Posts: 7,547	My personal statement it art based which obviously is different to yours, but mine was a lot longer than this one. I was advised to include (off the top of my head); My education and qualifications up until I wrote it... A small paragraph as to why you're applying to where you are (small enough so that it can be removed or edited if you apply elsewhere)... My influences (in art) - which artists have influenced my own work, or aspects of my work, or have inspired changes in my work...I guess for you that would be a load of drivvle about why you want to be a nurse... What you aim to achieve from doing it all (which basically is expanding the last line of your first paragraph) You also need to let them know what you're like as a person and what interests and activities you do that have nothing to do with nursing/caring - in mine I talked about music and what I've done involving motorsport, you need to show that you're an all-rounder.

16 Jul 2007, 22:22	#6
KebLou Mega Loafer Join Date: 02.03.2004 Location: The Arena of the Unwell Posts: 3,177	You also need to say what you've got to offer the University. It needs to read less about you and more about what you can offer them.

16 Jul 2007, 22:25	#7
duke knooby Mega Loafer Join Date: 24.06.2005 Location: belfast Posts: 17,889	(really sell yourself, they have to have YOU as part of the team) or just make it up..

17 Jul 2007, 01:20	#8
Fallen Angel Youth Gone Wild Join Date: 19.09.2003 Location: See the mad one over there.... Posts: 693	thanks:) wll see wot i can do

17 Jul 2007, 02:40	#9
Heli Daddy's little internet junkie Join Date: 29.01.2004 Location: Grimsby Posts: 4,596	A couple of tips i was given: Try and find different way to start a sentence (It's too easy to start with "I" all the time) Try and keep it to about 500 words Be different and creative about it....remember that they read loads of these; standing out always helps. And make it personal; dont keep it really formal, let it flow naturally/briefly/relevently informal for a couple of lines when talking about the past or something.