Not bad, Chris.
Thoughts from the boyfriend and I:
BG singers need to tighten up the harmonies.
Your character is great, but your voice, at times, suffers from being lost in your character. Remember to bring out your voice first, character second. I've heard you sing much better versions of songs than this.
The song moves SO fast, theres hardly any time to enjoy whats there. Slow it down a little bit!
You guys are doing a great thing, and we can't wait to see more!