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Originally Posted by Deb
Let's just hope your teacher isn't a huge Meat fan and then you'll get away with all the factually incorrect statements lol
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Let's even more hope he's not a steinman fan!
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Originally Posted by AndyK
OK, you asked for feedback, here we go 
Personally speaking, I agree with Evil. A persuasive essay should be just that, an essay that presents an argument for or against a topic, in this case "Is Meat past his sell by date?". You present a series of researched facts and details which, as has been pointed out are somewhat lacking in accuracy, and then you don't draw any conclusion or put forward an argument as to why that conclusion should be the right one. Other than the fact that you think you're a sad person because ytou want to go to a number fo Meat shows ... that's hardly going to persuade anyone else to go is it?
I don't know what the exact brief was for the esay, but based on the facts you've provided, which was that you had to right a persuasive essay on a topic of your choosing. I'd have failed it, but then, I'm not a teacher ... which is probably a good thing |
jeez, andy, you've really taking the spelling lessons, didnt you?
